Nina the Killer

Hazel The Killer a Yandere-

Feedback and ideas are appreciated 

So im doing a dark fantasy rewrite of numerous creepypastas as well as characters from the Slenderman mythos and Fear mythos.

I've been working on it for a while and, if you guys want, I can share some of what I've been making

Now when I say rewrite, im doing more than just giving some characters new powers, im rewriting their entire backstories, but only a few. Like Clockwork and Judge Angels

Right now im trying to figure out giving some characters special abilities.

The characters im having trouble figuring out how to add powers to are

Bloody Painter

Clockwork

Eyeless Jack

Jeff the Killer

Judge Angels

Nina the killer

Ticci-Toby

The idea for Bloody Painter is to make him like Sai from Naruto Shippuden and give him art magic

Clockwork is the one im most stuck on. I want to give her a power that involves time manipulation, but that gets really hard to work around. So then I thought, what if I just give her berserker rage, but Jeff was going to have that.

If you guys want, I can upload some snippets of worldbuilding notes, and other things.

I'm really excited to share this with all of you. Have a wonderful day/night

1. Jeff the killer. Reason: it ruined the entire genre of oc pastas, every time a oc pasta existed, it was marked as a JTK ripoff. (kinda sad)

2. Bloodshot Travis. Reason: I know, but it WUS good, a kid with heard problems and wants to be free, but it kinda got shit after first half, like bruh-

3. SONIC.EXE. Reason: sooo many grammars, and the author was a ####

4. Clockwork. Reason: comeplete JTK ripoff. like seriously??

5. Nina the killer. Reason: same with clockwork.

nina the killer is a great creepypasta

Edit: i posted this to prove 2 a pall that she sucks thx guys

For some, she's brilliant comedic material; for others, she represents a stage when many teenagers wrote their first Creepypasta OCs; and for still others, she's a complete flop.

In my opinion, some Creepypastas should be credited for trying to be original, but with some of them, they lack the scare factor and the right structure to be classified as both an "OC" and a "Creepypasta".

Nina the Killer is no exception.

Nina lacks any originality, looks exactly like her idol, and is in no way creepy. If you take away Jeff the Killer's influence on it, you've got nothing. In addition to the name, appearance, and origin, the creator did not attempt to make the story unique to the reader.

It is strange, however, that the very thing that makes her so unlikable is the very thing that makes her so admirable.

In Nina's defense, I don't see the point of calling her a "Jeff rip-off" when the entire point of the story is she's based on Jeff. In a way, Nina the Killer is supposed to be a rip-off of Jeff the Killer, as she is a crazed fan girl who wants to be just like him. The thing most preteen fangirls do is try to copy their idols. In fact, I think the concept of a fangirl who is overly obsessed is a great idea, because something like this could actually happen in real life, and probably has.

Stalkers and obsession-type Creepypastas have the potential to be disturbing. Imagine this; bizarre antics, juvenile delinquency, extravagant behavior, and all because they desire or "love" someone. Even ruthless killers don't want to be stalked by someone who is obsessed with them.

The concept of Nina is pretty interesting, but the execution isn't so impressive. Nina fails because she relies entirely on Jeff's story for every single detail of her own story, retelling an already existing Creepypasta's plot, character, status, and killings. It is also horribly translated, so that's another downside.

I would really like to see someone write a redeemable backstory for Nina someday that's more original and wasn't just an adapted version of Jeff the Killer. I think it would be more appealing to people, and they would come to appreciate her more. Until then, Nina the Killer is just a shitty gender-bend OC. Even if you still believe Nina is beyond redemption after reading this, that's fine too. It's at least a good thing that the author realized the story wasn't that good because you don't see many Creepypasta authors willing to do something like that.

Okay, that's all from me today. Let me know what you think.

- JAM

Alright, so, Nina The Killer huh.

Well, first I'd like to say I don't like either version. That is just an opinion and I'll explain why I think quite a few people think the same.

1. The first Nina is quite literally as stated in the notice. A simple carbon copy off of an already existing character. (Which is Jeff.)

2. Nina's original appearance speaks for itself, it's as said above.

3. Her revamp as some people have said is similar to that of Jane The Killers-- Family got killed, now seeks revenge, Hubadubado. Blabla.

4. I do like her new appearance look-wise, but in some logic, why would she need the brace on her leg? (I'm asking this before her English story is put on the page)-- Would this make it hard for her to run?

And that's kinda it. Feel free to say your own opinions in the replies.

I just read JTK's thing and what is Liquid Hate?

(Yeah You thought I was gonna trash it didn't you?)

I drew this art with my fingers and my mobile phone and I think now my fingers are dead because it was really hard and it took six hours to finish.

Without blood

With some blood

(This nurse was also present in homicidal Liu's story)

So I have seen how people hate the old nina the killer, because she us similar to Jeff the killer, and that thay insted like the new 2021 rebote. I acualy can't stande the new one, people were saying she us a bad pasta because she is similar to Jeff? Well this one is almost identical to jane the killer, I prefured the old nina because it felt like nice to see basically a fangirl turned pasta because yes there have acualy been people who have killed other in "the name of love" of a random pasta

Jason the toymaker X Nina the killer

I think Ticci Toby is hot