Sorry for not seeing the message sooner, that was my fault.

I'll gladly restore the page so you can make the edits to it, it's been a while so don't worry too much about the quality beforehand (it was about 4-5 years ago by now). If you weren't made aware, or there wasn't a review in the comments, that was likely our fault as it should have been made clear on your Message Wall or the page's comments.

Hope this helps 👍

Hey, is Crimson Moon's page better now? I reworked her to remove as much of the cliches as possible as well because they weren't adding to her story as much so there was no point in keeping them.

I'd have to review it when I get the time to later on in the week if that's alright.

Okay, I can wait until then. Thanks

Sorry for the late review, it should be posted in the comments to the page if you have the time to look it over.

It's fine I spent most of the day today revising it so whenever you get another chance to check it let me know. But I did make changes that fit with your recommendations because I had someone else writing the story at the time and I never noticed that I had so many issues in it. One of the changes was the car accident to a rough play near a steep ditch because I couldn't write her into a violent psychopath very well because I'm not a good writer myself. I did research and tried but it never worked out where it made sense so I had to skip it. Otherwise I did change what I knew that I could with the less vague recommendations you gave me and adjusted what I could with the vague ones.

It's alright, if you weren't too aware of the changes, it isn't your fault for the plot-holes. If you ever need someone to help with writing, I could always try to offer an interpretation for the characters' descriptions and drafts for the narrative if you need them

I don't mind trying to write a few scenes for you to review/inspect as well, it's up to you though

I'd like to have your interpretation for the characters' descriptions and a few scenes for me to review/inspect because like you said my oc has potential but she needs work. If I have your interpretations for the characters' descriptions and a few scenes to review/inspect I can work from there to make a better story that still suits her without the messy bits that it currently has.

I'd also like to see what you'd do for her with a couple narrative drafts but I won't push you on this option because I know that it takes a lot of time to write out a narrative for an oc and not everyone has time to do so. If you want to take a stab at writing her story too that's okay with me, but please focus on your interpretations for the characters' descriptions and a few scenes first so I can try writing her story too.

Of course, there's no worries if that's all you need as of now.

I can send a Google Doc over with a few things if you're alright with that. I'll put it as a separate message on your Message Wall so it'll be easier to track progress

Yes, that'd be fine with me. Thanks a lot for the help.