Jason the toymaker X Nina the killer
Jason the toymaker X Nina the killer
Well, there is some grammar mistakes, and I personally don't ship them two together, but you do you
...Okay, I'm alright with shipping so long as it's all in good fun and such.
But, I don't understand where this fanfiction is leading off into. Is Liu the father? And is the mother Nina The Killer herself or is that just the daughter?
If so, it's kind of awkward if Nina is just 3/4 years old and obsessed with Jeff The Killer or is the mother of (insert father's name, I'm guessing Liu)'s children (all four of them?) before Jason suddenly appears to...find them and is at the dinner-table?
Once again, so long as the ship and story work out as expected, then there should be no issue. However, besides the grammar mistakes with punctuation, the actual development of the story is kind of sudden with this version of Nina being a mother of Liu's children and having an apparent child-murderer/torturer sit at the dinner-table.
I’ll show you
I dont get the story
@SCPgirl - Whilst I do kind of understand the characters now, I don't understand why Nina is suddenly a mother as well as allowing another Creepypasta known to torture/kill children who refuse to keep playing with him.
Once again, shipping in good fun is fine, but you still need to have the decency behind creating a good enough story before you dive head first into a ship including a murderous toy-maker designed to be cruel most of the time to innocent children meeting a mother of 4 (who previously had relations with the brother of Jeff The Killer, which kinda makes for a possibly awkward family reunion) who is also infatuated with Jeff The Killer and somehow has a home/family to support whilst looking like she escaped a mental institution.
Plot-Holes:
Nina is obsessed with Jeff. So, unless you're making it in a timeline where she receives therapy or something, you're already heading into some strange territory with Liu and Jason entering her life.
Jason is kind of a child murderer. So, a family of 4 suddenly letting some clown strange into their home without even having one decent conversation? Yeah, kinda setting off alarm bells unless Nina knows him and his tale (actually, even with her knowing it that would be asking for disaster).
Nina did the naughty with Liu, leading to most if not all the children being his? Wow, that's...not too bad to be fair, but an explanation could kind of help I guess. I mean, she does like Jeff, doesn't make much sense how Liu is the one she was that close to.
I know this is most likely your first draft with shipping fan-fictions. However, this is usually where many fan-girls fail at their writing techniques and such to support their good fun. You cannot really just drag two people together so suddenly without much to show how it happens. It's just, and I'm being brutally honest here, you're kind of showing disrespect to the creations if you just toss them into a timeline together and make them a possible couple under weird coincidences.
Ok...I thought people would question how the how the f she raises 5 kids I guess not ok
What do you think?